Request for review and suggestions

[Chris Bailey]

[sugarrae]

[Chris Bailey]

Thanks Rae,

Well, for those using the free 1and1 site, font is one drawback. The only way I could make it darker was to make everything bold. If anyone else knows of another way, let me know.

I'll try to perk it up a bit. I've become so "hyped" out that I probably go too far in the other direction at times.

I think my writing skills are probably more suited for documentaries than sales.

Chris B.

[sugarrae]

LOL, I agree Chris - hype isn't good - but they are easy, and can make money and will earn them money month after month - so, it is factual information. It doesn't need to be flashing or animated - just maybe bulleted or somehow draw attention to the benefits they will receive that can be easily seen when skimming. Something that grabs them so that they want to read more.

As for your comment on not being good with Ad Copy... I have two book reccomendations for you:

Tested Advertising Methods by John Caples (legendary book and really is the end all on learning how to write effective ad copy that will work in pretty much any medium)

and

Net Words by Nick Usborne (which goes into more of writing for the net specifically)

Those two together should be able to give you some kick butt ad copy skills . Hope this helps.

[Chris Bailey]

Thanks for the book recommendations. Lord knows I need the help.

My main objective is to entice folks to at least get in touch with me, if they don't register immediately.

Well, I did my best to be more enticing, LOL. Let me know if you have any other ideas.

Thanks again,

Chris B.

[robert adams]

[Chris Bailey]

[altyfc]

[OpenSouls.com]

Just a thought - you might want to add some more colors or highlights to your Contact page, rather than just an HTML form. Also, I think you should try to add a focus point or two on the first page. Make a box, different text sizes or color, something to draw your attention.


Good luck!