Sales page help please

[sherrinc]

[painternc]

1) my opinion - there are way too many - camping- it doesn't read naturally. I was distracted cause I was thinking - the reason the word caping is used over and over is to get good SEO rating - but it distracted me.
2) Isn't it always good to start out with a question(s) Do your kids beg you for outdoor adventure but all you can think about is the hassle? I don't know what are some other questions you could come up with that people think about when they're getting ready to go camping?

Maybe include one of the recipes from the book in your copy.

I don't know - try lowering your price - use Lynn's Fast Cash Strategy of $10

Nan

[Adrian Jock]

[painternc]

[Adrian Jock]

[sherrinc]

[painternc]

[angienewton]

[sherrinc]

Thanks Angie!

[onlineleben]

[sherrinc]

I was wondering if I should add another order button so thanks for confirming that. I made that change and "beefed up" my copy by adding an excerpt from the guide like I did with the recipes.

I appreciate your help!

[onlineleben]

Sherri,
just checked your site again.
I would put an order button just above "Introductory Offer: $27.00 $17.00 which ..." because there the visitor sees a price and can make a decision if the price justifies the benefits he has just read about.
Good to see that you have put some cosmetics around your guarantee - looks good now, except that the text following it: "Yes Sandy, I'm ..." is not below the guarantee but starts besides it.

[sherrinc]